kayci
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Post by kayci on Jul 12, 2012 13:10:20 GMT -5
Welcome to the Pack
Who are you? [/color][/font][/center] [/b] Kayci Nicknames: Cici, Kay Gender: Male Age: 1 Year Sexual Orientation: Um.. o-o Straight? Species: Red Fox Pack Position: Undecided.. Nice to Meet You
How is Your Life? [/color][/font][/center] Abilities: Can shapeshift into a human at will. Personality: Very queit, doesn't enjoy big crowds, but can let loose and be crazy if he wants to, likes to be around friends and family, soft spoken, bashful. But is never rude to anyone, even if it is an enemy. Like's to talk things out and not fight or argue.(Has a bristol accent. xD) Physical Appearance: Tall, lanky, quiet masculin in the shoulders, a long tail, and long ears. History: Kayci was born as a fox, but as a throw back in his bloodline he inheirited the ability the shift into a human whenever he wants, but doesn't really use unless he has too. Kayci has no known siblings, and grew up with both his parents until he finally thought it was time to move on. He's never had a long term relationship with any female foxes, just because he never found the 'one' for him, but it was never him who turned them down, it was the females who did so. But none the less he's never found a need to have a partner beside him and perfers to work alone on most things. Just because he grew up practicly with himself and his parents, no one else. It's just normal for him. [/ul] |
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Post by AMYTHEST on Jul 12, 2012 13:56:25 GMT -5
We have fixed up your application to the best of our ability, but there are some things you need to fix as well before you can be accepted to the site. Things We Fixed:- You had copy and pasted the text instead of the coding in the box, so we have taken your application and fixed it to the coding. As you can see it looks much more organized now.
- The thread was posted as a reply to the board, but it should have been a new thread, so we moved it to be its own thread.
- We fixed up your image link to make it look nicer.
Things You Need to Fix Yourself:- By ability we meant things like strength in hunting, stealth, scents, tracking, etc. You may not have unrealistic abilities such as shapeshifting. This needs to be removed and changed.
- There are many spelling mistakes in your application. Please spell check, as even my Firefox browser picked up all the words. If you do not have a document or internet browser with a spell check you may go Here!
- Your physical appearance needs to be longer, as we stated that it much be at least one good paragraph with 6-8 good sentences.
- Your history paragraphs need to be separated with a space in between the lines, which is simple by clicking enter twice after each paragraph to leave a space in between.
- Your history paragraphs are too short, as each paragraph must be 6-8 good sentences at least. You must also remove the bit about shapeshifting.
- He needs to have a position added before joining. You can see the positions available under foxes in The World category under Position List.
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